Some museums and art galleries charge admission fees, while others have free entry. Do you think the advantages of charging for admission outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Museums
and
art
galleries
exhibition
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exhibitions
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have
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been
a
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very well-known
event
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events
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since
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decades. People, whether have
the
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understanding of
art
or history sculptures or they don't,
loves
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to spend their time admiring the same. We would like to elaborate here today is regarding the admission fee charged by the
Museums
and
art
galleries
.
Museums
and
art
galleries
are one the best entertainment hotspot,
place
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to gain historical knowledge and to admire
work
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the work
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of
few
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a few
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of the most skilled handed in history as well as in
present
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time. To ensure the functionality and day-to-day operations, admission fees are charged by the admin of
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hotspots. The charges are used to maintain the
place
in a well-versed manner and to maintain
the
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factors
such
a
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hygiene which are very crucial in today's era.
Museums
and
art
galleries
are to be cleaned regularly even twice in the day, the washrooms are cleaned well and to
be adhere
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to the hygiene guidelines mentioned by the authorities. E.g., Wax Museum in Lonavala charges around INR 1000
for
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the
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as an entry fee. The museum was very well maintained, and the
place
was very clean. Wax monuments were very indistinguishable, and
historical
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presence of the celebrity monument's great work is highlighted. Especially,
Museums
&
art
galleries
would be visited by
individual
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individuals
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or
group
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of individuals who are very keen towards the
art
, if the cleanliness of the
place
is not maintained,
such
set of individuals would tend to banish visiting
such
art
galleries
& may lose its reputation. To recapitalize, I would
to
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reiterate that charging a necessary admission fee for maintenance of the
Museums
and
art
galleries
is a
necessity
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activity, but should be charged in
such
a manner where an individual feels "Value for Money".
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