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Globalization is positive for economies but its negative sides should not be ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#globalization #economies
There is no doubt, that the
process
 of
globalization
 is enhancing the worldwide field of economy.
However
, there are
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plenty of adverse
sides
, that are have to be taken into consideration as well as its beneficial
sides
. I tend to agree that its negative
sides
 should not be pushed aside.
This
 essay will provide both perspectives on that issue. To start with,
globalization
 is one of the priorities to build up
the
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 stable economic state. The
process
 includes a lot of
countries
 resulting in their strong and friendly relationship. Each country, involving in
this
process
, take a chance to reinforce
financial
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 area and witness
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growth in that field. By interacting with other
countries
, the levels of export and import rise, which means that
countries
 produce and transport their product to other places. Apart from that, developed
countries
 financially help developing
countries
. Thereby their infrastructure and technological spheres substantially improve, which lead to business progress. Looking
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other perspective
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, except acting positively,
globalization
affects
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 in
negative
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 way too. By mentioning and emphasizing its profitable aspects in economics, people are
tent
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 to overlook its opposite impact. As a matter of a fact, the
process
 of
globalization
 has an
unfavorable
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 influence on spheres
such
 as culture, social area, ecology etc. Due to
integration
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Western
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lifestyle
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to
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 other
countries
, their historical and cultural values are in danger
to
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 be fallen into oblivion.
Additionally
, owing to
relevance
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 of the topic among
young
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 generation, there are appearing a number of sub-cultures that altering the world view of teenagers.
Besides
 that, development in infrastructure and technology can cause environmental problems like air and water pollution, which might lead to health issues. To conclude,
globalization
 is
large-scale
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 problem, that
causing
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 a dispute on its effects on
world
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. It is obvious, that there are a bunch of economic benefits,
however
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 its harmful
sides
 are
also
 presented. In my viewpoint, people should mention both of its
sides
 and consider
this
 topic objectively without bias.
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