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Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to youg people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #advice #youg
Life puts
people
 in some
situation
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situations
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 where it is inevitable to receive different kinds of
advice
 from
people
 of different
age
group
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groups
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. It is commonly believed that receiving
advice
 from
older
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the older
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 generation is better than receiving it from
younger
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the younger
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 ones. I disagree with
this
 statement,
however
, I think receiving
advice
 from different
age
group
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groups
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 completely depends on the
type
 of
advice
 and
experience
 of
people
 on the
subject
.
Firstly
, deciding
of
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whether
an
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advice
a piece of advice
a bit of advice
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advice
 should be received from a younger or an older
person
 could depend on the
type
 of
advice
.
In other words
, a young
person
 may provide
advice
 related to his field of expertise, while an older
person
 can give from his perspective of expertise.
For instance
, if
someone
want
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wants
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 to know about the function of the latest
iphone
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iPhone
 12
pro
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pros
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, it would be better to ask a younger
person
.
On the other hand
, if
someone
 wants to know about any traditional skills or problems related to work it might be better to ask an older colleague than asking a fresher or new
joinee
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joiner
.
Therefore
, it can be said that taking
an
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advice
a piece of advice
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advice
 depends on the
subject
type
.
Secondly
, receiving
advice
also
depend
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depends
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 on the
experience
 of the
person
 in certain fields.
This
 means,
age
 is just a number if the
person
 does not have enough
experience
 of the
subject
, his
advice
 might not help.
For example
,
someone
 is in his 50’s and does not have any kids while
someone
 in his 30’s with 3 kids, it would be
better
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a better
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 idea to receive
advice
 about raising a baby from the
person
 with 3 kids even though he is younger.
Thus
, taking
advice
 surely depends on the
experience
 of the
person
 on the specific
subject
. In conclusion, it is always expected that
people
 would require receiving
advice
 in their life for many things.
This
 essay argued that it is not necessary that receiving
advice
 from an older
person
 is always better than receiving it from the younger counterparts;
however
, it proved that taking
advice
 does not depend on the
age
 group rather it depends on the
type
 of
advice
 and
experience
 of the
person
 on the
subject
.
Submitted by muhammad.mahdibillah on

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