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Some people believe that it is better to get advice from old people compared to youg people. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Life puts
people
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 in some
situation
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situations
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 where it is inevitable to receive different kinds of
advice
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 from
people
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 of different
age
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group
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groups
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. It is commonly believed that receiving
advice
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 from
older
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the older
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 generation is better than receiving it from
younger
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the younger
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 ones. I disagree with
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 statement,
however
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, I think receiving
advice
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 from different
age
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group
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 completely depends on the
type
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 of
advice
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 and
experience
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 of
people
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 on the
subject
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.
Firstly
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, deciding
of
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whether
an
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advice
a piece of advice
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advice
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 should be received from a younger or an older
person
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 could depend on the
type
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 of
advice
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.
In other words
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, a young
person
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 may provide
advice
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 related to his field of expertise, while an older
person
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 can give from his perspective of expertise.
For instance
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, if
someone
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want
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wants
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 to know about the function of the latest
iphone
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iPhone
 12
pro
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pros
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, it would be better to ask a younger
person
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.
On the other hand
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, if
someone
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 wants to know about any traditional skills or problems related to work it might be better to ask an older colleague than asking a fresher or new
joinee
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joiner
.
Therefore
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, it can be said that taking
an
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advice
a piece of advice
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advice
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 depends on the
subject
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type
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.
Secondly
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, receiving
advice
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also
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depend
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 on the
experience
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 of the
person
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 in certain fields.
This
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 means,
age
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 is just a number if the
person
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 does not have enough
experience
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 of the
subject
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, his
advice
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 might not help.
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,
someone
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 is in his 50’s and does not have any kids while
someone
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 in his 30’s with 3 kids, it would be
better
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a better
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 idea to receive
advice
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 about raising a baby from the
person
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 with 3 kids even though he is younger.
Thus
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, taking
advice
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 surely depends on the
experience
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 of the
person
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 on the specific
subject
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. In conclusion, it is always expected that
people
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 would require receiving
advice
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 in their life for many things.
This
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 essay argued that it is not necessary that receiving
advice
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 from an older
person
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 is always better than receiving it from the younger counterparts;
however
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, it proved that taking
advice
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 does not depend on the
age
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 group rather it depends on the
type
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 of
advice
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 and
experience
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 of the
person
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 on the
subject
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.
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