In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment. What factors may have caused this situation and what, in your opinion, can/should be done about it?

It is a discussable concern that a lot of highly qualified
graduates
can’t get a
job
in some countries. There are innumerable and different reasons for every nation, particularly the developing countries
this
situation is still worse than the wealthy. I will explain the actual problems to face good
graduates
in my country.
Firstly
, in Mongolia, the progress of the HR field is begun recently according to the world’s standards. It seems that there isn’t any efficient, usable and holistic human resource system that can interconnect between employees and employers.
Thus
, now the real situation in looking for a
job
is that major
graduates
search for work through their relatives and friends. It is mean that if you haven’t a good network and relatives, you couldn’t get a
job
with a high salary and good prospects.
Secondly
, universities in Mongolia don’t assist students in the
job
-hunting process.
Graduates
have to find a suitable company or employee by themselves because
job
proposals are almost delivered to students before their graduation due to their universities don’t inform and propose them to employees.
Therefore
, I think educational organizations should increase their role in
job
searching. It is a potential way to drop the number of unemployed highly graduated students. Another reason why educational organizations should play a more essential role in getting jobs is that it can help to start early the process of
job
-searching. As early starting it, learners can expand
job
selections and they are able to find their dream work. To conclude, improvements in the HR sector are necessary to
graduates
who are looking for work and supports from colleges as well as universities are crucial for early starting
job
-hunting processes.
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