Many children have become habitual about excessively using mobile applications day and night. Why do you think is so ? What parents can do to avoid this situation declining further.
In today’s period, many youngsters are constantly using cellphones applications throughout the day and night.
However
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,However
cellphones
are both beneficial and dangerous Correct your spelling
cell phones
also
. I will be discussing my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Now Turning to details, as
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apply
children
want cell phones
everytime
and Replace the word
every time
everyday
. It is dangerous for Replace the word
every day
children
’s because the addiction of
mobile is very dangerous for their whole life and their health Change preposition
to
also
because of mobiles Correct your spelling
children
childrens
sleep late and wake up late in the morning. The radiation of Change to a genitive case
children's
tower
is not good for their health. Correct article usage
the tower
Children
’s are addicted with
playing Change the preposition
to
games
and making videos on platforms like reels, tik tok and many more. As per children
they Add a comma
,children
wants
mobile Change the verb form
want
instead
of learning lessons. I think that it was dangerous for those children
who want mobile everytime
. Even Replace the word
every time
parents
also
agree with this
but they can’t do anything because the biggest mistake is parents
has given the mobile phones
to their children
. For instance
, during survey
the use of mobile Add a comma
,survey
phones
below 18 was only 27% in 2005 and in modern
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the modern
era
it is 87% in 2020. In 15 years direct 60% of Add a comma
,era
increase
in Add an article
the increase
this
era
On the other hand
, parents
should take the responsibility of using phones
in limited
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a limited
time
. when parents
take their mobile children
want
to see Add the particle
to want
cartoon
and Fix the agreement mistake
cartoons
time wasting
channels. I think Add a hyphen
time-wasting
parents
should banned
channels like Change the verb form
ban
cartoon
and Fix the agreement mistake
cartoons
time wasting
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time-wasting
channel
because Fix the agreement mistake
channels
of
these Change preposition
apply
children
don’t want to participate in physical games
and more. Add an article
A parent
The parent
Parent
should not give cellphones to below 18 Fix the agreement mistake
Parents
children
because it is harmful for
their career
To sum up, Change the preposition
to
Correct your spelling
children
childrens
are Correct your spelling
children
future
of Correct article usage
the future
nation
they should not Add an article
the nation
spent
their golden Change the verb form
spend
time
in games
and other applications. They should participate in physical games
like cricket, football, hockey and many more outdoor games
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