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Some people believed that unpaid community service should be compulsory part of high school programs. Agree or disagree

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Nowadays, more people are doing charity works like offering financial supports to needy humans and visiting the orphanages for entertaining the children.
However
, it is essential to develop a healthy helping habit for children.
Therefore
, if the schools are taking responsibility for motivating the students to participate in any social service activities it is well and good. So, I strongly agree with the point that, educational institutions should have a mandatory programme the helping the community people as a part of student's curriculum.
This
 essay will discuss the topic in detail with relevant examples in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, improving the helping nature of the students will make them understand that, humans are not only working for money rather persons could even work for self-satisfaction and happiness.
For example
, the current generation kids are seeing their parents working all the time and they have the thought that people are living for earning money.
Therefore
, to alleviate
this
 concept from student's minds the schools should offer charity activities to them.
In addition
, research conducted by Banaras Hindu University, India proved that juvenile crimes are increasing because of greedy children and nowadays kids are not even scared to kill someone for money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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