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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a trend in which
people
 are keen to launch their own
business
instead
 of being employed by other enterprises.
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the reason and the potential downsides behind
this
 tendency. In my opinion, being self-employed could bring about higher financial profits. Compared to ordinary staff in companies who get a fixed salary from their employer every month,
freelancer
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 obtain higher autonomy of earning their own
money
 because they can decide their work-pace and type of
business
 they feel interested in.
For example
, a large number of young
people
 who own their own video page on YouTube, attracting heaps of
people
 following them. These followers might help them earn tons of
money
that is
 more than a monthly salary. Only a tiny part of the revenue will be shared with the video platform, which is unlike working in a company where you are not earning
money
 for yourself but for the whole company. Despite
of
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the financial advantage mentioned above, the downside of freelancers lies in the higher risk of failure, which means those
people
 might not gain higher income. Freelancers must make extra effort to create profitable products so that they can sustain their
business
. If a video blogger could not keep making qualified videos
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 a stable time rate, they can hardly earn
money
 from that. If it is the case, due to the status in which they are not under any relationship with other companies, they might find it difficult to cover their living expense in a long run. To sum up, in terms of own
business
, the promising prospective income exists along with the challenge of maintaining its operation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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