Modern societies need specialists in certain fields, but not others. Some people therefore think that governments should pay university fees for students who study subject that are needed by society. Those who choose to study less relevant subjects should not receive government funding. Would the advantages of such an educational policy outweigh the disadvantages?

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today's communities require skilled people in certain areas only ? It is believed by some people that the
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should disburse funds to the
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of certain specific courses which are considered more relevant to the upliftment of the
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and other less important subjects should not be considered for
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by the
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a proposal, I believe that the advantages certainly outweigh the disadvantages. The
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benefit of financial aid to the scholars of certain relevant fields is that the
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can lure
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for advanced studies in that particular course.
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, In India, we can merely see sewage treatment plants because
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are least interested in doing research on the same.
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research would definitely assist in developing talent in desired fields.
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educational policies are
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focused on raising the standard of the poor section of
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. It creates a sense of confidence among talented and needy scholars, which are facing financial problems since childhood because of unemployed parents.
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, Dr C.V Raman belonged to a poor family in Kerala and he was able to acquire his degree in space exploration with the help of
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by the
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of India.
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, these monetary schemes create a sense of competition among
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and benefits both parties.
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, disbursing funds for subjects that are the least contributor to
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creates an unnecessary burden on the
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's annual budgets. As per the survey conducted by the "Welfare
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of India", Research shows that 10 million
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were spent on history scholars fees.
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are only learning about the past but not future technologies.
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, financial
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for all
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weaken the whole idea of competition. To conclude, I would like to reiterate that while educational policy to grant subsidies to few talented
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only may have some disadvantages, I believe that advantages are far more.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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