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Nowadays, goverments are trying to encourage people to use buses or subways for their daily travel. What are the advantages of forms of public transport like these ?

#goverments #people #buses #subways #travel #forms #transport
Public transportation provides many
mobility
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, safety, and economic benefits to people and businesses. Beyond those key benefits, it
also
 offers significant environmental advantages that contribute to a better quality of life.
Firstly
 ,using
bus
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a bus
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, train,… save you an amount of money because the price of one car or motorbike is rather expensive .
Secondly
, the advantage I want to mention is that using
public
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the public
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vehicle
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vehicles
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 is a method to reduce air pollution and traffic jams.
Finally
, in the city, where the number of vehicles increasing makes the road crowded, the public transport system is developed to deal with traffic
jam
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 and reduce the pollutant released by petrol-run vehicles .
Besides
 , the fares are cheap so many people want to use
it
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them
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, sometimes it is crowded that it is impossible to
breath
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 and convenient for the
pick pocket
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 criminals to commit
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a crime
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crime
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. In conclusion, there are both positive and negative aspects of
the
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using public transportation.
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