Nowadays parents put too much pressure on their children to succeed.

Being a parent all the time leads you to look for a better way to develop your children's skills. These days sometimes parents forget about youngsters themselves behind the run for achievements. I personally completely agree that raising children should not be too pressing how we can see quite often but
instead
allow them to discover and master their talents in a more natural way. Social researches revealed that an average school pupil
also
participates in 2 or sometimes even 3 additional courses. In most cases, it's a sport similar to football or swimming, music and language courses but sometimes
also
chess playing classes or even math. All
this
activity leads to less self-aware days and simple games with friends or walks with pets. Additional courses are usually targeted to receive some kind of result and cause a lot of pressure
this
way. On another hand, we can allow them to choose their preferable activity and provide only suggestions about what may be useful and why. If one started to dedicate a lot of time to the professional sport
then
potentially childhood will be lost quite fast with established goals and targets for developing strength and stamina.
This
obviously may be really overwhelming because sport targeted to reach records. So, from my point of view, it’s better to concentrate here on the process in the
first
place
instead
of the result just to avoid significant pressure.
Also
, self-development areas as music and art do not have plain targets and plans for reaching records but
also
may be quite pressing. After all, receiving good emotions
as a result
and keep some free time will help to mentor boys and girls to grow well balanced.
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