Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People’s
view
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on
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the difference
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between salaries among
sports
celebrities and other
professionals
will vary from
one
another. In my view, I would state that the difference in
pay
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scale for
sports
dignities and other
professionals
is unfair. On
one
side, being a person who
pursue
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sports
as a career is not an easy job as there will be
lot
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of criticisms to face.
This
needs
high
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level of dedication, hard work, and strong belief to reach the stage of success. When they win in a competition, the whole nation wins and celebrating it in the form of providing high pay and sponsorship to the
sports
professionals
. As they are the
one
who is responsible for the nation to take a step ahead of
competition
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. Since they are famed, receives very good pay and sponsorship from companies to market their brand.
On the other hand
, people from other
professions
are paid less when compared to
sports
celebrities. The
professions
like Teacher, Doctor, Scientist, Advocate, etc
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are
also
essential for our society,
however
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their salary is low regardless of their consistent effort. Even
the
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sports
celebrities
are depend
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on
one
of these
above mentioned
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professionals
directly or indirectly. It is notable that, during
Covid-19
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pandemic
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we all relied on Scientists, Doctors and other
professionals
for our well being. We should provide our utmost respect and we should celebrate those
professions
.
In contrast
, people are running behind the
sports
dignities. In my
opinion
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every profession is essential and plays
crucial
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a crucial
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role in well being of our society. The variations in salaries among different
professions
is
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unfair.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial remuneration
  • exceptional
  • merit
  • talent
  • demand
  • entertainment value
  • career span
  • physical demands
  • justified
  • unfair
  • criticism
  • income inequality
  • societal priorities
  • sportsmanship
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