With the advent of social media, more people are getting their news online instead of from print media. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for people who read news online.

Nowadays, most people take the
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advantage
of keeping up with the world through social media rather than reading newspapers. I think that new channels for information transfer are
both
beneficial and risky and in
this
essay I am going to discuss
both
pros and cons. On the one hand, eliminating printed
paper
from our lives will help us to reduce
paper
waste and be up to
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faster. The
news
that is
published
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internet
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can reach
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its targeted audience within seconds, without harming
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nature. As an
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I remember my grandmother's small shop, where she used to sell newspapers. Year by year the amount of sold magazines and and newspapers
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reducing
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and it was quite
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noticeable
that
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modern
paper
news
are not attractive anymore. Even one of the loyal clients said that there is no sense to spend money on the things, that are already available for free. Yes,
this
is true, modern
news
is free, fast, accessible and quite attractive.
On the other hand
, having a trustworthy source is crucial. In social
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everyone can
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, post and share articles. There are
also
certain groups that produce fake
news
, in order to score some views,
therefore
having a reliable source is essential. In order to support my idea, I would like to bring an example based on my own experience. Two years ago I
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decided to cut off
paper
reading and switch
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internet articles. Right before the exams, my search
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engine
came up with an article, which turned out to be fake. Before I knew about it I failed my exam.
This
is to say, that printed materials are more accurate.
To sum up
, I want to highlight that
both
paper
and online channel
news
have their own benefits and
inconveniances
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inconveniences
inconvenience
and though online media is very popular nowadays, printed articles have a long life to live. I am confident that
both
channels can and will be improved in the near
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future
.
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