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Some people prefer to live in a house while other feel that living in an apartment has more advantages. Discuss Advantage and disadvantages

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A few people think staying in a building is more comfortable than an apartment.
On the other hand
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,some people realize that a residence is more convenient than a home .In my opinion,yes there is a few pros & cons for both but an apartment would be more convenient for living because of community .In
this
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 essay, I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a condominium and a penthouse .
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 of all , whom they wish to prefer to live in a quiet environment & comfortably, so the shack would be the right choice.In a
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 people could do gardening on the terrace or in shortage of space they can use the rooftop to use gardening and walking in the afternoon keeping feet themselves .
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,House maintenance is higher than accommodation ,because painting and utility difficulties may arise at any time and have to sort it out from own pocket. Living in a flat has some key benefits like strong community bondings, problem-solving jointly and must be cost-efficient compare to a box .Maintenance costs getting affordable for everyone .
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, staying in a cave has limited space to some extend crowded and a lack of privacy.
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,It has no scope for future extensions .whenever it's getting old depreciation will be higher and resale value compared to a shack reselling value would be much less . To conclude ,living in a residence is more convenient than a flat but considered to be buying and maintenance costs a condo is much affordable and lucrative than a building .
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