Nowadays people are moving to other countries for work. Some people say that it is difficult for children lives, others think that its better for them. Discuss both views and Give your opinion.

Nowadays people are doing immigration to other
countries
for job purposes, especially these kind of movements are very common from a developing country to a developed nation.
Although
a set of folks believe that, it is very difficult for a
child
to get adapt in a new country but, few others opine
this
and they think that it is good for children.
However
, in my personal, the
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European
countries
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the best option for the bright
future
of the
child
.
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To begin
with, the children can receive
a
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quality and cost-free
education
from European
countries
.
Nevertheless
,
this
point is applicable for those who do
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to the Arabian counties
also
, but schools
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free there.
For instance
, the
child
can get a chance to learn different languages as well as a variety of cultures.To summarize, international school experience helps the
child
to learn many things and
this
also
assists him to be a broad thinker in
future
. To continue with, international educational experiences makes the
child
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becomes
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more independent in
future
.
For example
, European
countries
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more freedom to
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children.
However
, the
child
will learn to distinguish
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right and wrong.
Therefore
, the kid can be a bold individual in
future
.
In addition
, a study conducted by Punjab University, India proved that
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the students who received
education
from abroad were more independent than a native degree holder.
Finally
,
education
is the key to success. So, it is important for a
child
to receive
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best
education
for succeeding in
this
competitive world.
Therefore
, I strongly agree that
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immigrating to other
countries
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for student's
future
.
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