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In many countries, students attend private ‘cram schools’ for extra coaching in test-taking techniques. What is your view of this practice?

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Attending extracurricular
classes
 to enhance students’ ability in taking exams have become more common in
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recent years. The necessity of these courses
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 the topic of much discussion. I firmly believe, given they do not put too much stress on pupils, exam preparation
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 can be generally helpful.
To begin
 with, Institutions providing exam improvement
classes
 actually help students to receive admission to universities and high schools.
Although
 the practice may seem unethical and wrong by some, these
classes
 have proven to give test-takers the extra push needed to access better education. They do
this
 by raising the confidence of students prior to tests and assisting them in maintaining focus.
For instance
, some pupils may have bright futures, but they could be denied entry to top universities due to the examination system.
Therefore
, a short course on relevant exam-taking skills can make a massive impact in their life and future
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.
Nevertheless
, there are issues that may arise from conducting
such
classes
.
Firstly
, the amount of stress and pressure that students may face during the course could have
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 effect on their well-being.
Furthermore
, focusing more on memorizing for a test beats the whole purpose of education which should be about learning and critical thinking rather than rote learning.
However
, the root of these problems is not after-school
classes
 but the education system that does not
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learning as much as assessments through examinations.
Hence
,
such
 challenges are unavoidable at these schools. To draw a conclusion, in my opinion as long as there are no real alterations to how grades are determined in our educations systems, extra
classes
 for taking exams can be viewed as generally beneficial to attendees. While there are difficulties that pupils will face, these institutions are not solely to be blamed.
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