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Fast food is a part of life in many places and as a result, this leads to bad effects in lifestyle and diet. To what extent do you agree?

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In recent years, the trend has been changed towards daily routines that impact eating habits. In many areas, people do not cook
food
 in their houses and eat from fast
food
 restaurant chains.
Although
, it has bad effects on human lives. I totally agree with the statement which argues, fast
food
 has negative impacts and cause many diseases. In the course of the essay, I will illustrate the statement. Most of the job holders in cities eat from outside
instead
 to prepare their meals in the house because their lives are very busy and most of the family members doing their jobs that's why they prefer to eat fast
food
. The Whole day spend in the office makes them exhausted and took their dinner from shop to home. A study published in Japan, eighty per cent population in urban areas eats junk
food
 and sixty per cent is teenagers and a similar trend in the USA and China. These regular junk
food
 eating habits are caused for long term illnesses. Fast foods are not designed to eat regular basis, most of
these
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this food
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food
 are not have those
ingridients
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ingredients
 which is necessary for our
body
 and it produces shortage in over
body
.
Moreover
, it generates an excessive amount of unhealthy things in the
body
.
For example
,
this
 kind of
food
 does not have vitamins which are essential needs of the
body
 on the other side it has more fat which produces obesity. In conclusion, in some of the busiest cities and countries, people are used to
eat
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eating
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 fast
food
 on a regular basis that does not have the proper ingredients demanded by the human
body
 that led to diseases.
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