whether it is possible to take a vacation from your problems.

I am writing
this
letter to express my happiness when I know that you have the intention to work in my country. I found a job at my local company that I believe will fit you perfectly. The title of the job is Computer Technician. Your main daily duties are fixing users' computers, controlling
network
Fix the agreement mistake
networks

It seems that network may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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and servers, and protecting our local domain from
compromise
Replace the word
compromised

The word compromise doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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hackers. There are two reasons that I believe
this
job is for you my friend.
Firstly
, you are the one who always
graduate
Change the verb form
graduates

The plural verb graduate does not appear to agree with the singular subject the one. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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at top of the class, while others struggling to pass the course. Because we are in the same classes so I know that
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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