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some people think that scientist experimenting with animal in a laboratory is the only way we can guarantee new products will be safe for human life. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #scientist #laboratory #guarantee #products #life
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Nowadays, As concern about the
safety
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cosmetic and pharmaceutical
products
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, testing the new
products
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 with an animal in a laboratory before introducing
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people
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 is
typical
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a typical
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 used
methods
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 globally. In
this
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 essay, I will strongly advocate why estimating the effects of the new
products
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 with animals can contribute to
safety
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 for humanity.
First
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 of all,
rats
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 and chimpanzees are always used for implementing experiments for testing cosmetic
products
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 and medicine because they are classified in the same species as humans, which are mammals.
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, according to BBC news, many chimpanzees were shaped hair for testing
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new skincare
products
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 in order to
guaruntee
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guarantee
 that there are no
any
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side effects on human skins, as they have
similar
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 type of skin to
human
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humans
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. For
this
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 reason,
this
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 can confirm the
safety
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 of the new
products
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 before rolling out selling
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shelf
shelves
shelfs
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.
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, as there are no regulations to prevent animal abuse, million of
rats
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 can be used for experiments, whereas
scientiest
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scientist
 cannot use a person for doing
test
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 due to the strict legislation to protect humanity.
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, companies can use a vast number of
rats
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 to test their
products
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, which can use them for testing until they confirm that their
products
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 have no harmful consequences on
people
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. To illustrate, before rolling out the Covid-19 vaccine to
people
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 globally, the vaccine producers vaccinated their
products
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 to myriad
rats
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, pigs, and horses in order to confirm
the
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safety
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 which is the main priority of the companies.
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, without sacrificing the enormous animal
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life
lives
lifes
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, the world cannot survive
from
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the Covid-19 adversity. In conclusion, laboratory experiments with
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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 are absolutely necessary for guaranteeing the
safety
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 of
people
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 as they have
the
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 similar organelle, and
infinity
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 number of them enabling
scientist
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scientists
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 can doing
test
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 until they are sure that their
products
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 do not have disastrous effects on individuals.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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