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Drug abuse is dangerous to society. Give the problems and suggests some solutions.

#drug #abuse #society
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Nowadays, many
crimes
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 committed in
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society are related to illegal uses of
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the drug
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drug
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drugs
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.
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, consumption of illegal
substances
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lead
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 to severe consequences.
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, every
communities
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 must take serious
actions
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 to eliminate these problems. The consumption of
drugs
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 not only cause health diseases but
also
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 higher chances of committing
crimes
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.
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Drug
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 have possible chances of changing the way
people
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 minds and bodies function.
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, sometimes overdose, which happened when individuals intake
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excessive amounts of
substances
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, can lead to several illnesses
both
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mental and physical,
such
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 as
hallucination
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hallucinations
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, cancer or even death.
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, It can make
people
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 become more aggressive since they are not fully conscious.
People
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 who take
drugs
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 have more chance of becoming more
violence
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 and furious.
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, there are lots of news about domestic
crimes
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,
which
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 drunk men violently attack
his
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their
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 families. To be more precise, teenagers who
addicted
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are addicted
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 to alcohol are likely to
got
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 out of school and completely ruined their lives. There are numerous solutions that can be done to alleviate
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this harmful situations
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this harmful situation
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 caused by
drugs
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 in
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society. To prevent
further
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 dangerous incidents that might
happened
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 strict laws must be used. Government should completely ban all
uses
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use
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 of
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the drug
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drug
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drugs
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, except for medical reasons. The authorities ought to strongly focus on the ways to prohibit any sales of illegal
drugs
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, like
heroine
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heroin
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, morphine and weed. The punishment must
also
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 be taken seriously for those who commit the
crimes
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 according to
drug
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 abuse. Another solution is that
people
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 must be educated about the consequences that follow when they take
substances
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.
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, for those who want to quit
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drug
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,
they
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go in the process of
drug
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 addiction therapy.
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, In conclusion, illegal
substances
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 lead to several negatives problems.
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, in
oder
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order
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safe
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 and peaceful society, problems of abusive actions caused by
drugs
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 need to be banished.
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