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Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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These days, few
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 think that the target of higher
education
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 is to acquire better opportunities, while other
people
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 trust, that
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 studies can be beneficial for the whole community.
This
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 essay will elaborate on both aspects
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 and foremost, university
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 is playing an important role for students to receive better job offers. Generally speaking, a highly educated
student
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 is always preferred for the job, as compared to the
student
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 who
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 a lower degree. Scholars in universities are in regular touch with sharp and like-minded
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.
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, a PhD
student
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 who has done extensive research on a subject would definitely have more ideas as compared to a B.Tech
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 and is likely to be hired by companies at a senior level position.
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, many
people
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 debate that higher
education
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 can be used for the betterment of society as a whole. In fact, it is irrefutable that every society needs brilliant minds to restructure the community in a way that evil components are eliminated completely.
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 can only be done when students come up with fantastic ideas and solutions.
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, a
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 in India designed
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artificial legs and hands for handicapped
people
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 at a very low price, whereas the same products were being sold at an absolutely high price by multinational companies. Not only but, his small idea gave the opportunity to start his own business but
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 allowed poor
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 to afford the products which were out of reach earlier. TO conclude, Few
people
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 may consider university
education
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 as a tool to get jobs only
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 in my opinion, higher
education
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 is always better for individuals and society.
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