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Why are some people who leave school early more successful compared with those who complete their studies? Provide reasons why they are more successful and what are the requirements for success?

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It is been over a decade about
this
 argument that about why some people who get out of
school
 faster have successful compared to those
complete
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who complete
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 their studies. the following paragraph will be provided about
reason
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the reason
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 and what is the requirement for their
success
. For the reason why those who drop out from
school
 early successful than people who complete. Because some of them already know what the best for them, and decided that drop out of
school
 is the best way to make their path easier than complete
school
. And, focus on what they interest to make that they will become one of the specialists in their interest. After
this
, it will make their road to
success
 visible for them to chase on.
However
, there are some requirements for
success
such
 as those who complete their
school
 need to know what they really want to do after complete studies either have motivated for something that they like and want to do to make sure that you will find the way to be the best of them in their field. And, the important thing is they will need to know which thing is suit for them not just follow
then
 wish for that they will be the one who
success
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succeeds
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. In summary, in
argument
Add an article
the argument
an argument
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 of why some people who do not finish their
school
 is successful than who does.
Main
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The main
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 reason
come
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comes
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 from their interest and they already decided that what thing is suit for them. After all, the important thing is known which thing suit you do not follow someone because of their already
success
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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