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The internet is viewed as an excellent means of communication by many. However, there are others who would argue that it is actually destroying our communication skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Internet
 became
the
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 essential part of human's life.
Moreover
,
this
 makes
communication
 easy. Even though a set of folks agreed that
internet
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the internet
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facilitate
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facilitates
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communication
 easy
also
, few others opine
this
. In my opinion,
although
this
 helps
people
 connected via gadgets
but
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,
this
 actually spoiled the happiness of
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get-togethers
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get
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 togethers.
This
 essay will examine the topic in detail with relevant examples in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with,
internet
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the internet
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assist
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assists
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the
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apply
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humans to connect
each
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with each
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 other irrespective of the distance they stay.
Instead
,
this
also
 keeps
relationships
 viable.
For example
,
people
uses
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 wifi networks to contact their loved ones from
the
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apply
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different parts of the world.
In addition
,
this
also
 helps to alleviate the
feel
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feeling
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 of homesickness. To summarize, adapting
thr
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the
internet
 facilities for
communication
 help to maintain
strong
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a strong
the strong
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 bond in
relationships
.
On the contrary
, due to the use of
internet
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the internet
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, the real essence of
meeting
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the meeting
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 had vanished.
Similarly
,
people
 lack socialisation and
also
 the real meaning of true
relation
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relationship
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 has no more. A study conducted by Rajiv Gandhi University proved that
current
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the current
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 generation
are
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is
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 not valuing
the
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apply
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parental
relationships
 comparing with
the
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apply
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older
people
.
Finally
, the
internet
 became essential for living in the present-day generation.
However
,
people
 should value
the
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apply
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relationships
 by finding time to see each other.
Therefore
, in my viewpoint,
although
internet
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the internet
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 makes
communication
 easy
also
,
people
 overused
this
 facility and spoiled the beauty of
relationships
.
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