The graphs below show the types of music albums purchased by people in Britain according to sex and age.
The following column graphs illustrate the types of
music
albums
bought by people in Britain based on their gender and age categories. The graphs compare three kinds of music
genres, which are
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pop
music
, rock
music
, and classical music
.
Overall
, more purchase
of the three types of music
albums
comes from the male population.There is a similar trend of the
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albums
purchase
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purchased
pop
music
and rock
music
.
Comparing the age categories, those aged 25 to 34 contribute to the most purchase
of the two music
albums
, followed by those aged 16 to 24, 35 to 44, and lastly
45 or older. More than 30% of young people aged 25 to 34 prefer pop
music
and rock
music
. On the other hand
, classical music
is preferred by those aged 45 or older, where about 20% of the age population purchase
it. On the contrary
, only about 1% of the young population aged 16 to 24 purchase
classical music
albums
.
In conclusion, pop
music
and rock
music
are popular among the young generation, while
classical music
is preferred by the older generation.Submitted by ahuja1221 on
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