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Some people say that teenagers should work part-time and earn money. This way they will learn basic lessons about work and become more disciplined. Others argue that teenagers shouldn't sacrifice their rest and after-school activities to work. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 working teenagers are one of the controversial themes nowadays. Many people believe that adolescents should work to gain financial independence and work experiences
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 others are opposite in. that idea because working students have less spare
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 and maybe don’t concentrate on their studies. In
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 of all, financial independence can be the result of work. If teenagers are employee can earn their own money and spent that on their needs like clothes, technological devices, books or even can save them for future needs.
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, worker students could take advantage of a working experience which will be useful for their adult life. When they are in a working environment, they grow into skills like problem-solving which will be very important when they start their occupation.
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, adolescents who have a job usually don’t have enough free
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 to relax from school and to engage in other activities and hobbies like reading, watching movies, or being a member of a sports team.
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, If they are employee maybe they decrease their study
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 and that cause to failure in their studies as they don’t have
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 to concentrate in their lessons. In summary, working children can be partially financial free for their family and to obtain skills for their future but
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, they lose
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 for their leisure activities and their studies. In my point of view, the benefits outweigh the drawbacks and it is very beneficial for teenagers to have a job.
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