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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Nowadays technologies enable us to read news and
books
 on any electrical
devices
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 without extra
cost
 than internet running fee.
Printed
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edition
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editions
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 of
newspaper
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newspapers
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 and
books
 are dying out soon. I totally agree with that. We can keep thousands of
books
 or hundreds of articles within a hand-size cellphone.
Also
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digital versions of them are more environmentally friendly. No more deforestation from making papers. Electronic
books
 and newspapers have many advantages. One of them is easy to use and reach. They need just tiny space to be stored in computer, tablet, mobile phone or e-reader made them available at
anytime
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 anywhere. You can be more
concentrate
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 on specific writing field you would like to read.
Such
 as Amazon’s e-reader “Kindle”. It takes a few
second
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 to connect an Amazon’s database via internet wifi and
then
 you can search for endless titles of
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the topic
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topic
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 you are looking for. Digital
books
 and newspapers are more environmentally friendly than
tradition
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 printed ones. The
cost
 of manufacturing and printing are completely removed which reduced
publishing
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 house’s production
cost
. No paper is used to print magazines and
books
 which means
less
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 trees are cut from our forests to produce papers. Water treatment after
printing
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 process
also
 need because
of
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water contaminated from ink waste is harmful to water resources. The process of printing is
time consuming
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 for
printed
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 newspaper before headlines published that made a publisher able to update new
informations
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information
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 only once or twice a day while
news
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 is happening around the world
in
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every
second
.
For example
, The New Yorker updates an article with recent
informations
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 that coming almost every hour.
In
addition
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 they are reducing
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the cost
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cost
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costs
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 for online sub-scriber
almost
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 30% compare with monthly printed issue
cost
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. In conclusion, I believe that amount of
books
 and newspapers are printed will decrease considerably. All of these factors convinced many people that digital versions of
books
 and magazines are
more
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 convenient and cheaper
choice
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choices
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. Printing
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huge
high
hugh
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 amount of
article
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 daily and weekly and monthly will demand additional resources and make them less competitive even in terms of price.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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