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Some say that new homes should be constructed in existing cities while others argue that new towns should be built (advantages/disadvantages)

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In the past two decades, there has been an exponential increase in the migration of
people
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 to different
cities
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 and countries, indirectly resulting in
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considerable infrastructure development.
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, there has been a long-standing debate on whether to direct these infrastructure projects to current
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 or establish new counties. Careful consideration of both alternatives reveals that each has its positives and negatives. One of the major advantages of focusing on current
cities
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 for new construction is that it would benefit the residents of the
cities
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 in multiple ways. Tenants living in Vancouver would prefer to buy a newly constructed house in the city where they work rather than in a new town, to reduce their commute time.
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, the city has everything they desire
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 as efficient public transport,
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 job market and affordable healthcare.
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 would not be possible in new
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 because of the time it takes to establish services and generate opportunities for
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.
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, accommodating
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 in houses built in newly created
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 would put them in a pollution-free and clean environment.
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 is because new
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 may take at least 10 years of time to become
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attractive
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 for
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 and industries alike.
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, their exposure to harmful emissions from industrial plants and transportation is reduced, shielding them from the risks of acquiring health complications. A recent report released by the word Health Organization (WHO) suggests that the number of
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 affected by airborne infections is 20% higher in
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 compared to new
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 that were formed just a couple of years ago. In conclusion, while there are both positive and negative aspects to these views, the decision on where to build the new homes to accommodate
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 population will depend on many other factors as well.
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, a thorough assessment is required before starting an infrastructure project.
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