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In some countries people encourage teenagers to find part time jobs. Some people agree and others don't. Review both sides and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that working from a young age makes us independent and self
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disciplined
discipline
. While some people believe that
this
 trend should not be followed, others argue that it helps to build
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 teenagers. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument and explain my support for the latter view. One of the most important
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 of teenagers involved in
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time
jobs
 is
time
 management. The
younsters
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youngsters
 who work in any
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time
 job are mostly
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undergraduate
 students or higher secondary students, because of their
part
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time
jobs
 they get very
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time
 for their studies which in turn leads to bad scores in their
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mark sheets
.
Additionally
, some
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time
jobs
includes
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 morning and
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 shifts, which is the most important
time
 for good sleep. As a
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result
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 it directly
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 the productivity of
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teenagers.
However
,
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time
jobs
gives
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 the opportunity to experience
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real
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the real
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time
 world apart from studies and college life. Working experience gives the chance to learn from your own mistakes from a very young age, that
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helps
 to build
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 stronger future.
For example
, there are some students who
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 not have any financial support for their education, they can earn their living and
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 their dreams, and achieve their goals
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 their own. In conclusion, working
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a
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part
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time
 can be proven hectic for
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 generation. In my opinion benefits of
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jobs
 in young generation are
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outweighed
 by the
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drawbacks
, I would prefer
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 indulge my children in
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part-time
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time
jobs
.
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