Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

music
is a universal language and it has become
most
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important thing of the
people
in present days and
i
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am considered that
music
can bring
people
get
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together which is from different backgrounds and ages.
this
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essay
i
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strongly agree with
the
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statement and there is no barrier
for
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it. obviously, many
people
who
belongs
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to any culture or
ages
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age
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that they love listening to
music
. there are some folk songs which were originated
in particular
places and they have
accepted
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and
also
recorded. even the language
difficult
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is difficult
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but
people
will try to listen because
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there is a good melody playground.
For instance
, Hindi songs are most popular all over the world but only
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people
who
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can understand the Hindi language apart from India. because
people
want to
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good
music
.
on the other hand
, a particular person who comes from another country no need
sings
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specific songs. if the song is suitable for the particular event or concert that he can sing whatever he likes. there for many
music
functions
such
as
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a concert
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concert
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concerts
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,
music
nights are taken nationally and internationally.
Hence
the audience has
mixture
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a mixture
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with
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of
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different ages and different cultures.
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can
people
bring close to each other. To conclude,
i
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believe
music
is the best option for
the
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people
get
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to get
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together. because it has not any
barrier
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barriers
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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