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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together.

music
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 is a universal language and it has become
most
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the most
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 important thing of the
people
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 in present days and
i
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I
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 am considered that
music
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 can bring
people
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get
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to get
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 together which is from different backgrounds and ages.
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this
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In this
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 essay
i
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I
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 strongly agree with
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this
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 statement and there is no barrier
for
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to
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 it. obviously, many
people
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 who
belongs
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belong
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 to any culture or
ages
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age
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 that they love listening to
music
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. there are some folk songs which were originated
in particular
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 places and they have
accepted
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been accepted
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 and
also
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 recorded. even the language
difficult
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is difficult
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 but
people
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 will try to listen because
of
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apply
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there is a good melody playground.
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, Hindi songs are most popular all over the world but only
few
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a few
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people
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who
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apply
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can understand the Hindi language apart from India. because
people
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 want to
listen
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tolisten
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 good
music
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.
on the other hand
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, a particular person who comes from another country no need
sings
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to sing
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 specific songs. if the song is suitable for the particular event or concert that he can sing whatever he likes. there for many
music
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 functions
such
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 as
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a concert
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concert
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concerts
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,
music
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 nights are taken nationally and internationally.
Hence
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 the audience has
mixture
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a mixture
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with
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of
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 different ages and different cultures.
there by
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thereby
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 can
people
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 bring close to each other. To conclude,
i
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I
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 believe
music
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 is the best option for
the
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apply
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people
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get
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to get
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 together. because it has not any
barrier
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barriers
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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