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Some people think that because children find subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 evolved to a certain extent that some
students
 find it difficult to understand(
for example
 maths or philosophy). Some people believe that it will be better if these
subjects
 were made optional rather than
compulsary
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compulsory
.
This
 essay will address both these statements and my opinion on the same. To start with, It is important for all
students
 to get
atleast
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at least
 a chance to get
the
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an
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 understanding of what a particular
subject
 is about.One advantage of having the
subjects
 optional is that the children will not feel
burden
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 of that
subject
 and
hence
 can focus on the
subjects
 that he enjoys learning.
For
example
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 a student that
dosent
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doesn't
 likes to do
math
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the math
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.
However
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 due to no flexibility provided in
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the curriculum
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curriculum
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 he still has to do
math
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the math
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.
This
 might affect grades for other
subject
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subjects
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 or
student
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students
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 might not be able to focus well on other
subjects
. On the other side, One of the major
disadvantage
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for
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of
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 not making
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 optional is that it might cause unnecessary stress to some of the children.As all children cannot handle the pressure
that is
 caused by the
subject
 that he/she
dosen't
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doesn't
don't
 want to learn.
For
example
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 consider a child that likes art but
instead
 of
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 he is forced to attend philosophy class. So in
this
 case it may happen that he/she may start bunking other classes and roam outside of school.
This
 will lead to some other scenario
alltogether
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altogether
all together
. So in a nutshell, In my opinion, it is necessary for
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the school
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school
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schools
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 to include a hybrid model
where
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wherein
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in
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students
 can get to decide their curriculum.
This
 will not only escalate
interest
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 of
students
 more towards their
subject
 but
also
 it will be beneficial for
school
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 to get their global rankings high.
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