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Some people think that because children find subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult, they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

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 for schools has evolved to a certain extent that some
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 find it difficult to understand(
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 maths or philosophy). Some people believe that it will be better if these
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 were made optional rather than compulsory.
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 essay will address both these statements and my opinion on the same. To start with, It is important for all
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 to get at least a chance to get
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 understanding of what a particular
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 is about.One advantage of having the
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 optional is that the children will not feel the burden of that
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 and
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 can focus on the
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 that he enjoys learning.
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, a student that
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doesn't
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math.
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, due to no flexibility provided in
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, he still has to do the math.
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 might affect grades for other
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 or
students
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 might not be able to focus well on other
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. On the other side, One of the major
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 for not making
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subject
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 optional is that it might cause unnecessary stress to some of the children.As all children cannot handle the pressure
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 caused by the
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 that he/she
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don't
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 want to learn.
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, consider a child that likes art but
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 of art, he/she is forced to attend philosophy class. So in
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 case it may happen that he/she may start bunking other classes and roam outside of school.
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 will lead to some other scenario altogether. So in a nutshell, In my opinion, it is necessary for schools to include a hybrid model
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students
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 can get to decide their curriculum.
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 will not only escalate
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 of
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 more towards their
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 but
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 it will be beneficial for
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 to get their global rankings high.
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