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Nowadays, we are suffering too much from the increasing of felonies that put our live and our property in danger

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Introduction
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 days , the newspaper and newsletters on TV became less is watched by some young generations in a lot of societies . Actually , I support
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 fact which creates unconscious
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 have not sufficient knowledge
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that
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 occurs around them .In the forthcoming paragraphs , I will discuss two reasons and
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solutions
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 may help and protect these young people .
Body paragraph 1
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social media is considered the fastest and easiest means to convey
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news
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between
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 our
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 in many societies .
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 their admiration like these means became blind and
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 their all life because the social media
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 as Facebook and
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Instagram
 and so on which have some sites are reliable and convey unfact
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 that it has
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 impact on
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 generation minds .
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 the same time , the
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 which
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 on TV became so boring because it has not been developed
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 years and
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 the newspaper still have the same old model .
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 the government should do
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to attract them and fit their thinking and minds .
Body paragraph 2
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 , Occasionally Some
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 search for
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entertainment to go
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 massive
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 that face
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in their life so they do not concern
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 these newspapers and
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 . these young people enjoy watching
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movies , series and some entertainment programs . It is necessary making a survey to ask them what the appropriate
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 programs that admire them and it is more followed .
Conclusion
In conclusion , the
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 and newspapers administrators should
develope
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develop
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youth
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 .

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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