Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing (for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras) in many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think the advantages of this development outwiegh the disadvantages?
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camera
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a camera
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; I used a smart phone
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this
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around ( 10-15) days I collect it from Aramex store. Therefore
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Moreover
, it may affect their lives, by mean it could lead the society to adapt lack of communication skills and unable to socialize among peers and families, in addition
, it may lead them to severe injuries, due to distraction by using smartphone
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a smartphone
then
when he checked his from sudden he been distracted by one of the notification, then
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forward
next
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provide
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security
this
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will keep on with non stop
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non-stop
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