In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level.

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below a certain level for a little group of
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with extremely big
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. The
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view is that the existence of a little amount of extremely rich
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is good and the control of them is definitely bad, while the
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view is completely opposite. On the left-hand side, a very small number of really rich
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, cooperating with the government, can affect the rest in a sociopolitical way by spending some of their own money to make life at a certain place better without taking money from everyone around.
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. the control of rich peoples'
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is a violation of their rights, and the violation of rights is never a good thing. On the right-hand side, the existence of a small group of really rich
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makes the difference between them and the rest of the society bigger and bigger.
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, it is really dangerous to allow their
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to keep being so big
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because the social difference can cross the line of absurd once. My opinion is that the government shouldn't allow
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above a certain level, but do it very carefully, because in most cases
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confirm the thought about huge society difference, and the government can be those
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.
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, the society of the Russian Empire was built in
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a way, where rich families were rich for generations, and poor
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could never change their situation. Poor hated the rich and rich were treated poorly like they are not men at all.
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