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Nowadays people tend to change a few career during their life What are the reasons for this in your opinion? Do you think it is good for the society as a whole

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People
change
 their Jobs to get a better opportunity. Nowadays many employees tend to
change
 their field of
job
 during their life basically there
are
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number
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a number
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 of reasons for
such
 changes in
there
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 career.
To begin
 with, candidates
now a days
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nowadays
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 have a wide source of
job
 searching tools
such
 as monster, Careerbuilder, indeed. These
kind
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 of
job
 boards are easily
accessable
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accessible
 by talent hunters and
every one
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 has their resume on
these talent acquisition
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 and there are many factors why
poeple
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people
 tend to
change
 jobs
for
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example
,
firstly
 to
leanr
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learn
 new skills and
softwares
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software
example
microsoft
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 excel and word and to gain exposure in the
job
 market because with the opportunity to start with a new
job
 role they will have the variety to choose
career
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a career
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for
example
,
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 if a candidate is from an administrative assistant profile than they might be interested to look for a better
job
 like in Human resource by switching positions will help in the growth of an
induviduals
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individual's
 salary and will have the chance to work in
a
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different work culture. Honestly,
this
change
 in an
induviduals
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individual's
individuals
 employment will gradually lead to the development of
the
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society. People with
advance
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 skill set would attract more business in the city more companies will establish tere firms and unemployment will decrease to a certain level and the society living standards will improve with the growth of salary and the quality
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 of individual will be full of luxuries
example
 they would be able to afford a big
appartment
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apartment
 or a big house with a big car that will enhance their way of living and with
such
 career changes they will never be left unemployed because they would have a variety of skills and would
easly
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easily
 be able to
etablish
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establish
 themselves in the field of
job
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 industry. In a nutshell, I would say
chaning
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changing
 careers will make people get familiar with their hidden talent and they would eventually be able to achieve heights of success and will make the nature of society healthy and wealthy.
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