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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many are of opinion that cooking is an essential life skill and should be educated to boys and girls in schools while, others are of thinking that it is waste of valuable school
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 , an essay I am going to discuss the pros and cons and I am in favour of the educating than not. Cooking is a complex science and it needs precise knowledge of ingredients and quality and quantity of other substances to mix with to get the best out of cooking in sense of preserving nutrients and enhancing their absorption and
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, saving from
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 poisoning.So it is vital to have some basic education during school
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 which makes the students life easy in future and enhance chances for a job in
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 industries and saving money by self-cooking as they do not need to buy the costly restaurant and fast-
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 meals. Opponents of education advocate that in
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 of hurry and bustle ,people do not have
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 for preparing
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 and are going to rely on the fast-
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 industry and restaurant chains for their
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 requirements,
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 adding cooking to the syllabus is just a waste of
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 which can be devoted to other valuable subjects and home cooking will decrease the revenue of convenient
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 industry and government income from taxes. In ,
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conclusion I will support the above-mentioned education as it is worth the
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 devoted to these skills in terms of the quality of healthy and nutritious ,
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 they can get by learning
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