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Many people nowadays travel abroad for the university education why do people do this would you consider doing this yourself and why

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In recent years it has become normal for
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school graduates to travel abroad for their university education. There are numerous positive aspects to study overseas,
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 as the discovery of new cultures, the possibility of learning more about yourself and the chance of learning a new language. By travelling to a foreign nation, it is certain that one will be confronted with foreign customs and traditions. Experiencing and understanding these customs and their origin provides people with an interesting chance to develop a more open-minded attitude towards others.
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, it is
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 extremely stimulating to learn more about the reasons behind certain traditions and
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. The prime reason for
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 studying abroad is the prospect of finding oneself and growing as an individual. When living in a foreign country,
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 to become increasingly independent and they are confronted with your strengths and weaknesses. Typically young
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 develop self-esteem and
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 acquire or improve upon their skills of housekeeping and cooking. Which are important for living independently later on in
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. When living in a foreign university
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 are exposed to a new language and in most cases attempt to learn it if they already possess some knowledge about the language, they have the possibility of advancing
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 improving upon these skills with the native population. The ability
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to speak multiple languages of a student
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higher chance of being successful on the Internet job market, which makes studying abroad an attractive choice.
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 I would like to study abroad in either Scotland or France because I would like to experience
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life
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 on custom in these countries.
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, I would like to become more fluent in
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French, as I believe
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. In conclusion, studying abroad of the possibility for
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 to grow and develop as individuals and to acquire valuable skills that will be useful in adult
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