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In many countries, the amount of crime is increasing. What do you think are the main causes of crime? How can we deal with those causes?

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Crime is a
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deterrent
 to the economic and social growth of any country. with the growing technology and education rate, unemployment has become a paramount roadblock worldwide. in the upcoming ,paragraph I will elucidate my opinion with the help of a few examples.
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 has made education fees very nominal due to which our literacy rate has gone very high but there is no increase in the job market due to
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 many youngsters are unemployed and moving towards the path of crime, In a recent survey
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 Indian government literacy rate of India has reached 90 %
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, with the boom of technology now information is freely available and you can connect with anyone anytime free of cost. people are using technology for a lot of criminal activity.
for example
 in one of the bomb blasts
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mumbai
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 the accuser confesses that he learned to make bombs online with free videos. To Recapitulate,
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 needs to work on increasing employment and relaxing loan policy which will help youth in getting employment or starting their own business
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 action should be taken to restrict the webpages which provide anti-social information.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic disparity
  • propensity
  • recidivism
  • deterrent
  • rehabilitative
  • judicial system
  • corruption
  • socioeconomic
  • alienation
  • stigmatization
  • decriminalization
  • enforcement
  • gentrification
  • preemptive measures
  • intervention strategies
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