Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Each person’s
condition
in this
world is not the same. Some people
are rich while
others do not even have a dollar in their wallet. Some people
think accepting a bad condition
, for example
, lack of money and an unsatisfying job, is better than trying to improve such
conditions. This
essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail and then
provide evidence as to why individuals should continue improving their lives
for the better.
Some people
believe that any misfortune that comes into our lives
should be accepted. The benefits of accepting those difficulties make them more patient and calmer in their life. However
, enduring all those pains and hardships will cause a stressful life for them. If they cannot cope with the stress, they probably will develop mental illness. For example
, a person who was born in a poor environment will normally think to accept his condition
.
On the other hand
, some people
make a firm decision to adapt to a bad situation and then
try their best to change it. These types of people
are optimistic and determined to improve their lives
for the better. But, by doing that, they will face many difficulties and must persevere in any conditions. Such
as, a person who does not have a monthly salary job, should think more creatively to find a way to generate a better income. In my opinion, people
who manage to overcome any troubles they face will be able to improve their lives
.
In summary, some people
just accept any difficult condition
in their life while
others do not. I believe, we, as humans, should proactively try to change the worse for the better.Submitted by blackvv on
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