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The length of the working week does not reflect modern lifestyle needs, it should be substantially reduced to give people more leisure time with their families, how far do you agree with this statement,

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In modern
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 working individuals do not have
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 for their family and hobbies,so does not accommodate lifestyle requirements and working
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 should be lowered to a limit where
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 people have sufficient
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 for above-mentioned activities, I personally agree with the statement and going to elaborate my view in
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 essay. working
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 in the majority of countries consists of 6 days of
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, with daily eight to nine hours and at places even 12 hours a day and if you add
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 for travel to
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 and back
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 practically they left with nothing at the end of the day which, in long term effects their personal and family life and adds up to the number of divorce and family break up, reflecting in future generation-children,In ,short they just becomes machine slave and money-making instrument only.
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 a heavily packed
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 schedule does not allow for exercise and proper relaxation which reflects their health as well as the quality of
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. For the sack of
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-life ,balance working
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 should be shortened to five days with 8 hours a day which will provide more job opportunities in society and reduce stress on those who are working on
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 hectic schedule,
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 will provide
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 for family ,socialization,exercise and leisure activities and add much needed short breaks from
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 for replenishment of mental and physical health. so considering all the pros and cons , I will go with a small working
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 with better quality of employees life in the long run to give better quality and productivity of
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