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There is a trend of increasing amounts of consumer goods, which leads to environmental problems. What are the reasons for this trend? Give your own opinion and solutions.

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Nowadays, the number of products that people use rises every year and it can cause environmental issues.
This
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 essay will discuss the main causes of natural problems and possible solutions to these problems.
To begin
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 with, the two main reasons why
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 of
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 goods can lead to the issues are using the natural resources and pollution from
factories
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. Increasing demand among people makes companies find new resources which have to produce the product from nature.
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, mobile phones are popular among teenagers.
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 is why many firms that produce the electronic devices in the UK seek the new caves which have metals
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 as irons, gold or coppers in order to create their phones. Another reason is when
factories
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 have lots of orders they need to use
energy
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 as fossil fuels and it leads to pollution or releasing the wastes from there
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 causes contaminated water that affects creatures in the river.
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, there are some possible solutions to
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 problem. Selecting the products that can reuse or recycle to reduce spending money on the same product
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 as fabric that we can use again. individuals in some countries can donate or exchange their old mobile phone for discounts and the old one will transfer to the
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 and recycle useful parts in order to reduce the wastes and costs.
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, spending money on eco-friendly goods which do not affect the environment and
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 degrade in nature can protect the problem from waste issues, and the
factories
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 should be conscious about the
energy
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that is
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 used to create their product. They should find alternative
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instead
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 of fossil fuels
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 cause air pollution like solar
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, thermal
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 or hydro
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. In conclusion, expanding consumer demands can cause natural problems since they need to find the ingredients and activities of
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 exhausted gases and chemicals into the river. In my opinion, everyone should be aware of
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 problem and encourage eco-friendly products that can be reused or recycled in order to reduce waste and aid the environment.
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