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Many people say that the use of animals for the purpose of experiments is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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Animals
 have been part of human history since they started to
domestisize
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domesticize
domesticate
 dogs. Humans have benefitted from
animals
 in many ways, in the form of
woodstock
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, raw meat, fur, milk, etc. In some
of
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the
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civilizations,
animals
 are being worshipped as gods. Since
,
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 society kept developing animal usage went from domestic to commercial business.
Such
 as
,
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 horse trade, cattle trade, and to extent of being used in wars as
a high end tools
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a high end tool
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. In
recent
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 past,
animals
 have been subject to medical experiments. The basic instinct of human survival forced humans to advance in medicine and try out different medicine on
animals
, in order to ensure no side
effect
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 can harm human beings.
This
 has been criticised by animal welfare organisations all over the world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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