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With the latest technological advancements, dating is now possible online. Would you recommend online dating for your single friends? What are the advantages and disadvantages of online dating? Site some examples to support your answer.

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Social networks have become a part of our life and fewer
people
 meet on the street, or in public places now than in the past, and more often, they do it by using the
Internet
. There are both advantages and disadvantages of
this
 phenomenon, but I, in turn, would not recommend
such
 sites to
someone
 I know. Some of the advantages of
internet
 dating are that it spares time, as well as gives
opportunity
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 to meet many more
people
 and at
anytime
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. There are no restrictions on the number of acquaintances on the
Internet
. It is possible to conduct relationships and correspondence with several
people
 at the same time. The
Internet
 opens the boundaries and a
person
 can find
people
 not only for love relationships
,
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 but
also
 for friendship.
For example
, I was able to get acquainted with an interesting
person
, who
subsequently
 became my good friend.
Besides
, it is a convenient way to meet and communicate
for
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 busy
people
, who do not have time for personal meetings.
However
, dating on the
internet
 has its negative sides.
First
,
people
 may impersonate, or pretend to be
someone
 they are not actually. While a
person
 is chatting on the
Internet
, he or she does not know what the interlocutor really looks like. There are
people
 who deliberately hide their appearance and deceive.
Furthermore
, the
Internet
 is full of scammers who have bad intentions and want to get rich at
someone
 else's expense. A good illustration would be the story of my female classmate, who met a
person
 on a dating site. Afterwards, he turned out to be a fraud who offered her to go to a questionable site using a link that he sent her. Fortunately, she did not do
this
 and everything worked out. In conclusion, searching for a partner or a friend on the
Internet
 is gaining popularity and has both pros and cons.
Nevertheless
, I believe that only at a personal meeting is it possible to find out what kind of
person
someone
 really is, and
therefore
 I do not consider online dating a good idea.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Wider pool
  • Potential partners
  • Pre-screening
  • Compatible interests
  • Convenience
  • Accessibility
  • Empowerment
  • Deceitful profiles
  • Misrepresent
  • Lack of depth
  • Physical appearance
  • Analysis paralysis
  • Cyber-security
  • Compromised information
  • Dating app
  • Common interests
  • Meaningful connection
  • Identity theft
  • Overwhelming choices
  • Social circles
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