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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
It is argued that
governments
 should invest
on
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railroads
 far more than road infrastructures. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and it will be discussed two environmental and financial reasons
of
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this
 position.
governments
 can reduce many environmental degradations by deriving people to
use
 railways as an environmentally-friendly transportation system. They should spend money on
advertisement
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 to help individuals so as to be aware
about
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 various positive environmental aspects of using
railroads
 like decreasing
amount
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 of CO2 which can release a great deal of pollution into the air.
Furthermore
,
governments
 are more likely to
use
 the earth natural resources in the most efficient ways and save its non-renewable resources like gasoline by utilizing electric trains.
In addition
,
governments
 can make remarkable money by more
use
 of
railroads
instead
 of road systems. Trains potentially have
an
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 ability to transit a various array of goods and passengers conveniently which could be considered as a versatile vehicle. In
majority
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 of
countries
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the countries
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 railway network is monitored by
government
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the government
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 and they have put
noticeable
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the noticeable
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 amount of money for users as tax and accessibility
right
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rights
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 to
use
 rail infrastructures by private companies.
For instance
,
Union
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the Union
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 Pacific railroad in
United
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the United
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states
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 has over 400,000,000 dollars income annually that 30% of it must be paid to
government
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the government
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 as these rights.
This
 revenue could be far more than the cost of base US rail infrastructures and support most of their expenditures. Some may believe that the most proportion of
governments
 budget should be spent on roads as more connectable transportation mode which helps people keep in touch easily.
However
, if countries have congested rail networks, they will be able to
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accessible
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in
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each
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 time and everywhere they want. To sum up,
governments
 could have a very proper environmental and financial condition by investigating on
railroads
further
 more than road networks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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