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In many countries today, many highly qualified graduates struggle to find employment. What factors may have caused this situation? What can be done about it?

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As an increasing number of people go to
university
, it is now common that
graduates
 cannot find employment.
This
 is a worrying situation, but there are some solutions to it. The current problem of graduate unemployment is largely caused by there being too many
graduates
. In the past fifty years, going to
university
 has evolved from being an extremely rare occurrence for the smartest students who wished to learn specialist knowledge into something that millions of young people do. The result is a surplus of over-qualified candidates chasing the same jobs. In many countries, the economy is contracting and these
graduates
 have to fight over very few available positions. The ones who do not get a job are left unemployed because they feel too qualified to take a lower-level position and work their way up, especially after having spent four years gaining advanced qualifications. Thankfully, there are some possible solutions. The
first
 thing to do is to recognise that higher education has become too common, and so perhaps it is time that alternative routes are sought. Rather than going from high school to
university
, students can
instead
 be encouraged to find a vocational training program and enter the workforce soon after leaving school.
This
 would allow them to learn some practical skills rather than the theoretical knowledge they would get from
university
, and
then
 build up real work experience over a long period of time.
In addition
, universities could set up better facilities for students to get
such
 practical experience, so that when they look for employment after graduation, they will not be at
such
 a disadvantage. In conclusion, many
graduates
 are unable to find employment nowadays, and there are various reasons for
this
. The solutions are not easy to apply, but there are some possibilities to reduce the severity of
this
 situation
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