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Describe the information shown below in your own words. What implications do the indicators have for the countries?

The table gives information about four indicators (annual
income
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 per
person
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, life expectancy at birth, daily calorie supply per
person
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 and
rate
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 of adult
literacy
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) in
Canada
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,
Japan
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,
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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. Units are measured in $ for annual
income
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 and % for
literacy
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rate
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. Overall, the highest annual
income
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 per
person
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 takes place in
Japan
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, whereas both
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 have a very low annual
income
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 being the lowest that of
Zaire
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. The adult
literacy
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rate
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 is highest in
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 compared to
Zaire
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, which again has the smallest figure.
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,
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 consume the largest number of calories per
person
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 whereas
Zaire
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 consumes the least amount. With regard to annual
income
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 per
person
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, the figure for
Japan
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 is the highest at 15,760, followed by
Canada
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 at 11,100 and by
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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, at 160 and 130$ per
person
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 respectively. Life expectancy is near 80 in both
Canada
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 and
Japan
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, compared to
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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, which is about 50. Moving to daily calorie supply,
Canada
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 and
Japan
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 consume a larger number of calories, at 3,326 and 2,863 respectively whereas the remaining countries consume under 2,000 calories.
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, the
literacy
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rate
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 is at 99% for both
Canada
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 and
Japan
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, being at 68 and as low as 34% for
Peru
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 and
Zaire
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 respectively.

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