As science and technology contribute most to the development of society, science students should get more financial support from government than students in other fields (eg. business, language, etc.). To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Science and technology is the key sector for
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the emergency
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situation of the society. Students who
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in
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field
should be financed by
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since it is totally
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public service. I totally agree that
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field
is more critical and required more attention from
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since they needed more practice in costly machinery and practical
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environment
.
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of all,
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field
of
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also
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of
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but
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of
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are less expensive and can be afforded by
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since they do not need any special infrastructure and equipment for practice. Doctors, nurses and technical people who
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a vital role in saving a life of
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people
so they needed more practical based
education
as well as comprehensive material which is very costly, so assistance may
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from
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because these expenses may not be afforded from personal resources only.
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to that
this
education
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more surgical machinery and technology because when they complete their studies they will have to with
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directly. So it is compulsory to learn while studying at university. For
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example, doctors and
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nurses
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important point is,
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is pretty expensive because
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only the material but
also
the teacher and
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accommodations
for practice.
This
learning is
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based and needed an export, a qualified teacher who has done lots of research and gain experience in
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relevant
field
.
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experienced professor from another country could cost
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taken as an instance. So, for these
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these
field
fellows
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government
contribution so that nation can get qualified
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surgeon
and
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technicians
technical
who can save
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of people and keep away from
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an emergency
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situation.
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, the
government
should provide more aid to
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science
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and technology stream of
education
because they
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sacrifices
their valuable time for public services since the other
field
of
education
only take care of
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emergincies
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emergencies
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fields
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • contribute
  • development
  • society
  • financial support
  • science students
  • other fields
  • government
  • equal
  • pursue
  • scientific studies
  • balanced approach
  • academic qualifications
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