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IN SOME AREAS OF THE US, A "CURFEW" IS IMPOSED, IN WHICH TEENAGERS ARE NOT ALLOWED TO BE OUT OF DOORS AFTER A PARTICULAR TIME AT NIGHT UNLESS THEY ARE ACCOMPANIED BY AN ADULT. WHAT IS YOUR OPINION ABOUT THIS?

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A ‘curfew’ is imposed in some areas of
US
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the US
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. During
this
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time
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,
teenagers
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 are not permitted to visit their
friends
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 or be with anyone
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outdoors
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out doors
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outdoors
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 after a certain
time
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 at
night
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 unless an adult accompanied them. In my opinion,
although
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 teenage
children
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 prefer
the
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apply
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freedom
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 all the
time
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, including nights,
parents
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 put
this
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 curfew for the safety of their
children
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. On the one hand,
teenagers
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 always prefer to be with their group of
friends
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 or with their loved ones all the
time
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 especially during
night
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 times and because of that, they hate
curfews
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. Mostly, they arrange parties or sleepovers, in which they can spend
time
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 with
friends
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 and enjoy the
night
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. They get very disappointed and frustrated when
parents
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 imposing
curfews
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which
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that
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 stopping them to attend these
late
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late-night
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night
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 meet-ups with
friends
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. Because of that,
teenagers
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 think that the curfew taking away their
freedom
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.
On the other hand
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,
parents
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 imposing
curfews
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 during
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night
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the night
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 times just to protect their
children
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 from any danger. Considering the crime rates in
US
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the US
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, especially some states in
US
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the US
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, every parent try their best to find ways to protect their
children
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. Imposing curfew during
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night
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nighttime
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time
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 is one
such
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 method to ensure the safety of their
children
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. It is concerned by most
parents
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 that
the
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apply
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teenagers
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 can easily get in trouble if they get
the
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apply
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full
freedom
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during
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at
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nights
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night
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. So, they imposing
curfews
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 to restrict
teenagers
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’
out-door
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outdoor
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 activities during
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night
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the night
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time
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 on their own
instead
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, one of the
parent
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parents
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 can accompany them if they have any important reason to visit their
friends
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. In conclusion,
teenagers
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 always prefer their
freedom
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than
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to
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 their safety, but
parents
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 imposing
curfews
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 during nights just to protect their
children
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.
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