International travel has many advantages to both travellers and the country that they visited. Do advantages outhweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays,travelling
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abroad is popular in all countries which
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many
benefits
for both
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and
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society.I believe that the
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far more its drawbacks.
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and negative aspects of international travel. On one hand,Traveling
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overseas has many
benefits
for both society and
traveler
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travelers
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.The main advantage is that
,
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visitors will have a chance to expand their
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.They can think
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outside
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out-side
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the box ,
morever
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moreover
,visitors can
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their knowledge about
different
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a different
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culture
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cultures
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,
style
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styles
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of architect and
cousine
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cuisine
by travelling.
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important to note that
traveling
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is highly beneficial for society.As the number of
travelers
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increased,the standard level of living in the country rise.In more detail,
travelers
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bring currency and have been
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in
others
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countries,
furthermore
,it causes boosting the economy.Many job
oppotunities
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opportunities
were created because of
tourist
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tourists
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.
On the other hand
,
tourism
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industry has few drawbacks and put negative effects
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the environment.
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,many historical places were destroyed and
misbehavior
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of tourists
were
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belamed
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blamed
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for that.Many scientists agree that
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travelling by
airplane
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has some negative effects
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the environment.It is not deniable that
tourist
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tourists
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might change the culture of the specific area which is unacceptable.According to the data of an international bank in the UK,
poor
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the poor
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population has been never
tought
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taught
thought
about visit other countries. To conclude,travelling
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abroad has many positive and negative consequences.According to what I said,the
benefits
of international travel is far more
its
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than its
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drawbacks.
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