In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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believe that travellers will prefer going on holidays in their home country to travelling overseas.

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statement. In

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essay, I will give reasons to support my viewpoint. On the one hand, the number of foreigners rises year by year because the cost of transportations is cheaper.

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, several low-cost airlines promote the lowest price to consumers. On top of that,

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travellers can access the local information more convenient.

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, foreigners can get to know local places to visit or well-known foods in Thailand by searching the internet.

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, they can make a reservation or inquiry about more information through the online channel.

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, tourists will go to visit other countries with more confidence.

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, some

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said that travelling in their own country was not exciting.

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, the expenses of transportation

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domestic are lower than international.

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tend to

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go overseas. Two main reasons why visiting domestic places is not a preferable choice are crowded over the holidays and some places destroyed by tourism.

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, an ancient city in Bangkok is facing the problems that

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who visit there are careless and may leave some trashes.

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, the government is trying to improve

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landmark. It would not help because there are always filled

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tourists and difficult to maintain.

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, visiting abroad is

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destination during the holiday. In conclusion, both domestic and international travel will give a different experience and the cost.

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, I strongly believe that in the future individuals will choose to go travel abroad over in their country, as they can not only avoid crowded but

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get reasonable prices.

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