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~*Cyclists and car drivers sharing the same road causes some problems. What are the problems and what can be done to reduce them*

#~*cyclists #car #drivers #road #them*
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Nowadays, there is an increasing trend of automobile usage among people either for personal or commercial purposes especially in cities, among these
road
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 users are cyclists and car drivers who ply the same route, situations like
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 come with some issues .
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 essay will discuss some of the issues and suggest possible ways out
To begin
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 sharing by various commuters increases the traffic jam along major city roads.
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 increases the amount of time
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that
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 can be channelled to
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more productive use. In turn,
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 time
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 wasted on their journey.
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, the Lagos-Ikeja Ring
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 which is a link to every street across the state experiences gridlock on a daily basis
as a result
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 of impatient cyclists and car drivers navigating the
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. A means to address
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 problem is for the government to construct alternative routes for bike users
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 as sideway lanes and underground cycling paths
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them
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.
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, efforts to overtake among
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 travellers have caused a tremendous rise in
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the occurrence
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 of
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 traffic accidents(RTA) across the globe. According to America Trauma Association statistics, there has been a surge in RTAs over the past three decades, the incidence was stated to be as low as 5% in 1990 but has risen significantly to about 60% in 2020.
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 has led to many untimely deaths while traversing roads as compared to other means of transportation. In order to tackle
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, the government should enforce speed limits and appropriate sanctions for those who disobey. In a nutshell, construction of driving paths compatible for bike riders and imposition of rules to regulate driving pace with appropriate punishments for defaulters will help reduce travelling delays incurred through hold up and
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 traffic accidents.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • narrow and crowded roads
  • visibility issues
  • conflicts
  • risky overtaking maneuvers
  • designated bike lanes
  • collisions
  • safe space
  • improve visibility
  • road sharing rules and etiquette
  • sustainable mode of transport
  • public campaigns
  • safety aspect
  • coexistence
  • foster
  • invest
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